Sorice007

Well, the cheesy factor is a bit much, but it seems like you're adding fictional elements to real life events in your own life. (Like the part about the you ...

1. Except in very limited situations, dialogue needs to end with punctuation, for example: "Hello," she said. "Hello!" she said. "Hello?" she said. I agree with this. Also, "radio set" ...

Bill Nye, the Science Guy! FUNNY! (Should have had something about John Jacob Jingleheimer Schmidt to make it funnier! (Like one of the alien's names was that) The story is ...

Wow! I love this short story, and believe some kindergarten teacher somewhere will be reading it soon! (Honestly, it's publishable) I would like to read it again and again, like ...