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No, you're valid! I appreciate knowing that it comes off so dark.

But I'll definitely keep all that in mind when I do my next draft! :)

Mmm, I don't think Mel is hopeless or depressed, though? She's just observing the sadness and messed up aspects of the world as they are, like you said, and her ...

Ah, yeah, I see that. Yeah, the more I think about it, that switch in order would be good but dang... That'll take some time and I'm not quite ready ...

Aaaah thank you so much for this beautiful review! I seriously appreciate it so, so much. I'm so glad you connected with the characters; that was my overall main goal. ...

Thanks for the review! There definitely are some clunky places and overly wordy parts... I'm going to have to smooth that out. I also originally had it quite darker, and ...

(thanks in advance. *squish* )

Thanks! I didn't continue this but I'm glad you liked it!

That last stanza is incredible. Wow.

I guess I'll just see as it continues. :) I wish I could help more but I'd be happy to do that sometime!

It's okaaay it happens hahaha Yeah I always read it the day you post but I never really have time for a constructive response, and I usually don't have much ...

I love this story SO MUCH I want you to know that I made fangirl squeals while reading this because there is SO MUCH TENSION and I'm completely hooked. That ...

Thanks!

Yo about the hands bit- the bottom part of Michigan is shaped a lot like a mitten, so people will point at their hand to show where on the "hand" ...

Aww, thank you! I appreciate it!