Sohini

Firstly, congratulations to Dan for writing such a long and incredible poem. Well, just a reminder, so that you don’t misunderstand me, for poems-size really doesn’t really matter. The flow ...

Is that all? More chapters coming up?I liked the change of tone as the story got deeper. Like first it was humourous, then serious and finally quite emotional. Well done. ...

it was un-Potterish. The theme was kinda silly-cleaning Sirius’s bike. Lupin and his friendship bit was okay, but nothing much. There is hardly any depth in the storyline. But I ...

That was Rowlingish!! Well done! The writing style was very fine-so much like the books. The story was good too. But I feel that it was a bit vague. I ...

Thoughtful-really thoughtful. I liked the metaphor very much nad the way you’ve put things fit in. you missed a ‘t’ in ‘Putting’ in the 30th lineg and isn’t it ‘looking ...

*chewing on a fresh carrot stick* What’s up, doc? That’s it? No sputtering Daffy in real? He’ll take revenge-boy, does Daffy hates being mentioned in a story but not appearing ...

First of all, 90 degrees Fahrenheit is equal to 32 degrees Celsius which is not at all hell-hot. We are facing 40 degrees C now in Spring-it will reach 45v ...

Hey, not bad. I never knew you could write swell! But I must say that this story lacks a proper and definite plot-it’s a bit vague. You should edit it. ...

The poem is vague. The first sentence is incomplete, ‘Frilly frocks and golden locks’ did what ‘as she danced in the snow,’? a verb is missing between the phrases-don’t you ...

Nice and warm family topic and I’m sure you feel better after letting out the secret. I enjoyed this because of the lively conversations and your way of telling bits ...

This poem was amazing but I didn’t like the way you concluded it. I think the cold, dark atmosphere which you had brilliantly created was marred by the fact that ...

Nice-very nice. The short and rhythmical lines are fabulous!! I really liked this: “As I hissed and fumed My very state did scare A rather weary moon” In the line ...

Hmm… This poem is a bit unlinked and too bizarre. And it has a potential to be better. The way you’ve placed the “I write”s are unconventional but at the ...

Wow that was really great!! I didn’t come across any mistake but the line ‘Yes, my parents got divorced, and a marriage came to an end, but that is something ...

look i never read the second and third parts. i'm wrtting bout the first bit. here's what i think: Is there more to this?-the end seems very abrupt. Anyway, I ...