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Re: Eyes Wide Shut 3.3 (Edited)
Hey Deanie! It's Silver here again to review for you!! :) Main Points Boyle stopped a few meters away from the group of terrorists, In this paragraph you've used Boyle ...
May 15, 2014 -
Re: Un-feared.
Hey there Nishi! Silver here to review for you today!! :) Let's get straight to it! Main Points : Speaking on a microphone. After a colon you don't need to ...
May 13, 2014 -
Re: Eyes Wide Shut 3.2 (Edited)
Hey Deanie! Brownie monster back to devour another chapter! So Main Points Your first paragraph could have been structured slightly differently to make it stronger and give it more impact. ...
May 13, 2014 -
Re: Eyes Wide Shut 3.1 (Edited)
Hey Deanie! Back to read more of your scrumptious story! Well, I guess the other two have basically hoarded all the nitpicks for themselves, anyways I was enjoying the plot ...
May 13, 2014 -
Re: Eyes Wide Shut 2.3 (Edited)
Deanie!! It's me again! :) Naomi's alive! *cheers* Another amazingly well written chapter! :) I think the problem is that I get in after everyone's said everything that needs saying ...
May 11, 2014 -
Re: Eyes Wide Shut 2.2 (Edited)
Deanie! I'm back and what a chapter!! Whoa! Like seriously wow! DID NOT SEE THAT COMING. Okay so let's face it, this review isn't going to be much apart from ...
May 11, 2014 -
Re: Eyes Wide Shut 2.1 (Edited)
Hey Deanie! I'm back to review your lovely story :) little droplets on magic on some I found a nitpick! "on" should be "of" right? Anyways, that was sadly the ...
May 11, 2014 -
Re: Suicide Blonde - Chapter 5 - The Return of The Tasteless Advertisement
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May 11, 2014 -
Re: The Reaper in Black -- Chapter One
Hey there Sherri! silver here to review for you :) First of all, I love you avvie! So cute :) On to the other stuff! ---> Main Points Punctuation You ...
May 11, 2014 -
Re: Eyes Wide Shut 1.2 (Edited)
Hey Deane! Back for round two! Yeah! So I have like no nitpicks so well done!! One of the things that I'm loving about your story is how well it's ...
May 11, 2014 -
Re: Eyes Wide Shut 1.1 (Edited)
Hey Deanie!! :) Silver here to review this for you!! I've been eyeing this story for a while now and you've done such a wonderful job reviewing other people's novels ...
May 10, 2014 -
Re: Suicide Blonde - Chapter Four - Choices
Back again!! It's so awesome I just have to keep going! Main Points wipping up a storm I daresay, Whipping. exploded when she the state her bedroom was in. "saw" ...
May 10, 2014 -
Re: Suicide Blonde - Chapter 3 - Telephone Box
Hey BSif!! Silver back to review another chapter!! So the first thing I want to say is: Mitchell? As in THE Mitchell :D Though I doubt he's a polar bear ...
May 10, 2014 -
Re: Suicide Blonde - Chapter 1 - Chateau Rouge
Hey BSiF!! :) I really liked your style in Mitchell's Help Guide so I thought I'd review this too :) So.. Main Points Rage was the new texture of Poppy's ...
May 9, 2014 -
Re: deleted
I am back for another chapter! :) Main Points So I'm really annoyed at Vivi at the moment. I mean, your friend just said that her mother is missing and ...
May 9, 2014