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Alchy! Here I am again! :D Main Points “Thank you”, he spit out, I would recommend against using the words "spit out" here, seeing as any terminology associated with spitting ...

Alchy! I'm back again! :D Main Points Okay so there's something I want to point out: There's this paragraph: The man took him away from his village. and this paragraph: ...

Alchemist bro! I'm finally here to review your works! :D Main Points The large bonefire on the beach reflected its light over the sea, Lovely bit of imagery :D Fat ...

Hullo Meg! Here for another Veil chapter! :D Okay so again I don't really have much to say about grammar or any other technical stuff, I'm sure there are heaps ...

Yo, yo I'm back! :D Main Points There are none. XD I couldn't find anything. Alrighty, this is going to be a really short and pathetic review. I can't find ...

Meg! I'm back! Yeah! :D Main Points "It's about time." Argh! That killed me! Hillarious! XD :D She started tearing up as footsteps sounded in the hall. Wait... am I ...

Megsug! Hey! :D It seems that I only review your chapters on review days :/ That has to change. Main Points One of the women he had known when he ...

Ari! Another FF chapter! Yesh! :D Main Points that used to mirror in their father's eyes, I think I prefer the term "had been mirrored" instead of "used to" here, ...

Hai Deanie! :D Main Points The skyscrapers reached upwards, almost as if they were trying to touch the cotton clouds themselves. I would say that the analogy of skyscrapers is ...

Deanie Beanie! How are you? :D Main Points That was what we were the equivalent to now. How does she feel about this? Especially seeing as this contrasts so much ...

Pompy, Goldie, I'm baaack! XD First of all I'm going to say that I heavily agree with all of what Dragon said, and she covered alot of what I had ...

Pompy! Goldy! Gosh, two of my favourite people in one work?! How could I resist this! :D Main Points Walking by the bank of the lake There were some lovely ...

Hey Aria! *Throws Silvery Glitter* Main Points a merchant's carriage I'm curious, is this really a merchant's carriage? Or is it actually Illuan's carriage? If it is Illuan's then I ...

Deanie! :) *waves* Main Points “Avril,” Naomi said as she walked next to me in silence. The first and the last parts of this sentence contradict each other. Naomi's clearly ...

Meshy! :D So clearly I'm busy studying for my all important exams which is why I'm here reviewing your story :) I love your narrative voice! It's really pleasant to ...