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Like this? "After his wife had returned from the hospital, he had found her in the emptied nursery, with a paint roller in her hand, covering the memories of a ...

Oops! Now I'm really confused. :lol: Don't worry, that happens often... Don't worry. Ask any writer here who likes well-developed characters, and you'll find that they have done the same ...

Very poignant. ;)

Wow... this has become popular. For a second, I must admit, I thought I may have my chapter one comments on this story and vice versa, which would have been ...

AHH! WHY DO YOU TYPE SO SMALL?????????????? *grumbles and copies and pastes it on Word*

STYLE Okay, first of all, the grammar stuff above was just how things are. This is me being a little nitpicker. So feel free to ignore any of the advice ...

I... knew that.

No, don't worry, you make sense. ^_^ But this story has never been written out before (thus, the reason why you've never read it Beet). I've always told it orally ...

BEET! *huggles* Um, I would like you to meet Beet, who is the girl/creepy man which this is dedicated to. ^_^ Oops! Beet already mentioned the teenager/teenage mistake. *whimpers* As ...

Ooo! I like it! Writer's block, please go away! :D

I'm glad that, on the whole, people like it. My brother, the official prologue-slayer, even said it was okay. Yay! But... as for the words, I don't know. Taphis loves ...

Oh, this was good for your age. ;)

I changed it to "chuckled" though! ;) Sure, give me a full critique. It might help with my other stories, especially since you're talking about word choice, which is something ...

Right now this is a funny story. Should I make it a creepy story with a more believable ending?

The conclusion was fine. The ending sentences were particularly strong: Until then, people should continue reading books like Generals Die in Bed. Even if the true horrors of war can ...