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Re: I'm visiting you mom...
Aw, this is so sad! :( All right, so I don't know if this is based off of a true story or whatever (I hope it isn't!) but I'll pretend ...
May 1, 2011 -
Re: The Deserter - Chapter 2, Part 1 (OUTDATED)
I am not looking forward to finishing this novel. It is so good! :D Just a couple of things! I'm not going to do an overall thing again, because the ...
May 1, 2011 -
Re: Cat Steps (draft)
Hey Rosey! :D Okay, you're going to hate me for saying this, but I actually think you went too fast for this! While it's neat to be dumped in the ...
May 1, 2011 -
Re: The Devil's Pocket Watch (1)
Hey Pink! Just a few nitpicking things first, and then we'll start getting into the meatier parts! “Let me get that for you,” Her father offered, taking hold of her ...
May 1, 2011 -
Re: The Devil's Pocket Watch
Hello, my favorite leader! :D Crosse raised his head while watching a child trip and land in a puddle. His mother lifted him up and around her waist then jogged ...
May 1, 2011 -
Re: The Deserter - Chapter 1 (OUTDATED)
Hey ultraviolet! I found one huge error in this piece that rather bothered me: This is the first draft of my new novel The Deserter. I know it's not that ...
May 1, 2011 -
Re: The Spare~1 (Edited)
Ooers! You have a very clean style of writing! I like it very much. :) In the Prologue, I think it would be best to mention the sons' names! That ...
May 1, 2011 -
Re: A Letter to the World
Hey Kim! :D All right! Now, I'm not against the subject at all because hatred is never good! So, poems that ask for less hatred are awesome. With that said, ...
May 1, 2011 -
Re: The Peddler
Hello! :D Okay, so I don't traditionally read horror since it either I get absolutely freaked out or I don't get it. So! Just be forewarned before you read my ...
Apr 30, 2011 -
Re: Song of the Siren
Hey bluewaterlily! :D Yay! Greek mythology references! :D Okay, so I've just been immersing in Greek epics, such as Homer and Aeschylus, so I'm a bit biased perhaps, but I ...
Apr 29, 2011 -
Re: The Lion and the Hare
Hahaha! I like this one better than the other one! I kind of find it difficult to believe that Ned can get away, BUT. The very fact that he got ...
Apr 29, 2011 -
Re: Agony in a receptacle.
Hi Nihasa! First of all, I'm not quite sure this belongs in Romantic Fiction, and it certainly doesn't look like it's a novel. Would you like me to move it ...
Apr 29, 2011 -
Re: Daddy's Gone Away
This is so sad. :( It makes me really glad that my daddy is ready to be hugged every night! I love your choice of narrator. I am not sure ...
Apr 29, 2011 -
Re: XXX
Woo! I can tell already that you proof-read this story, and I kind of adore you for it. You're awesome! :) Just one thing I noticed! It says here, "I ...
Apr 28, 2011 -
Re: Being Beautiful Hurts
Hey Shadiqua! :D Okay, first of all, this is really, really bright and unreadable! I don't know about you, but when I read my stories, I really like it when ...
Apr 28, 2011
