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Hey Eli! The main thing I have against this poem is it's very telly! So basically, you're telling us who she is, but you're not actually showing us anything special ...

Hey Ray! :D This may just be a pet peeve of mine, but don't start off with saying that there are no words to describe [insert something here] because as ...

Tangent, mi amor! Thanks for posting this. :) Now, your poem can basically be broken up into three parts! 1. Orca whales swimming in a too small sea for their ...

Parodies = awesome! Especially Star Wars parodies. They're just fun. :) A couple of things! You misspelled "Matrix" several times throughout this piece... it shouldn't be "Martix!" Also, this might ...

Hey scary panda! :D Definitely very random! I was kind of lost, because I'm not very familiar with why this scene is relevant, so my advice is to make it ...

Hey Temptation! A forbidden love thing, eh? Neat! I'm curious as to what their ages would be as well... both of them seem really young to me, so I'm kind ...

Miss Lovely Loveless! :D Okay, so maybe I've read too many stories and such (read: definitely read too much) but when I read your first paragraph, I was like, "Aha, ...

Hey RedSun! Right now, this piece tries to explain itself too much. I realize that this is a fantasy world of sorts, so it's necessary to introduce the reader to ...

Hey rainbow! :D A very action-packed story! Anything with guns and such gets my vote immediately! Plus, the dialogue is pretty dramatic... definitely awesome! With that said, you're definitely going ...

Hahahaha! This is why clarinets should be FEARED and RESPECTED. And no, I am not in any way, shape, or form, biased. No siree! Moving on with the critique... ;) ...

Hey Kat! I'm not really good with lyrics, but I'll give it a shot anyway. Hopefully, I'll help you! :) One of the things that I was wondering about was ...

Hello ATreeah! I love camp stories! They're just so neat, and they invoke some very fond memories for myself. :) With that said, I think you can definitely expand on ...

Hey Duggie! :D One of my favorite series of all time is the "Time Warp Trio" series. It's insane... and it features guys going into alternate worlds all the time. ...

Hey, Matthemus! This story seems a bit quick! At first, it seems like it's a scene from Aladdin ... then it turns into a world opening up... and then it ...

Hey Chelarose! You have a very beautiful username. :) Now, for your story! I found many of the thoughts very interesting and it was, all in all, written well... always ...