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Re: Reclamation Chapter#3
Sorry for the late review. I didn't have access to my laptop for a while. Progression Ailia As I walked up the flights of stairs in the block of flats, ...
Jul 31, 2011 -
Re: Reclamation Chapter#2
Ailia 17th August 2556. Looking at the date, I felt misery as cold and as heavy as boulders settled in my stomach, weighed me down. Grief clawed at my windpipe ...
Jul 23, 2011 -
Re: Reclamation Chapter #1
Okay first off let me say that this is a good story so far. I really like it. So because of it, I am going to give you a review. ...
Jul 20, 2011 -
Re: Prologue for Untitled Novel
Hi, I’m Sky and I’m going to be reviewing your work today. I've put my corrections in a spoiler so it wouldn't be a huge page of corrections. The full ...
Jul 17, 2011 -
Re: The Town
Hi, I'm Sky and I will be reviewing your work today. I have put my corrections into a spoiler so it's not taking up a ton of space. The wind ...
Jul 13, 2011 -
Re: For Rory
Hi, I'm Sky and I will be reviewing your work today. The painful silence of the hallway was tearing me apart. My eyes were pink and swollen and I had ...
Jul 6, 2011 -
Re: Hero of Treason, Chapter 1
Hi, I’m Sky and I am going to be reviewing your work today. Amaris crouched on a rock. Her green eyes glowed, as much a part of a panther as ...
Jul 6, 2011 -
Re: On the run
Hi, I'm Sky and I will be reviewing your work today. Janice was running through the forest, here you don’t need an and trying to catch her breath as she ...
Jul 2, 2011 -
Re: Return What's Mine
Wow, this is a good story! Very descriptive and well written. The only thing that I have to say is that it feels a bit rushed, but I get that ...
Jun 30, 2011 -
Re: Marked
Okay, here are some things that I found in your story when I was reviewing it. I have put the corrections and stuff in a spoiler because it was too ...
Jun 29, 2011 -
Re: nothing
Okay, here are some things that I found in your story when I was reviewing it. I have put the corrections and stuff in a spoiler because it was too ...
Jun 29, 2011 -
Re: Dark Child - Prologue
We were sitting on the bridge, our legs hanging freely over the edge while our feet were dancing on the surface of the water. There we sat until one of ...
Jun 29, 2011 -
Re: The Return
Wow, this is a very good story. You really feel the characters and their emotions. Also it was very well written. I liked it because of that. The only things ...
Jun 29, 2011 -
Re: The Writing Pest
I agree with the others. This would be a good poem. I really like because I can totally relate to it. Writer’s block sucks to get when you are finally ...
Jun 28, 2011 -
Re: an aestival whisper
Wow. I like the imagery you put in my head. It was very good. The only thing that I saw that was wrong was cryers should be spelt criers and ...
Jun 28, 2011