SimpleBicycle

Thank you for the review! I'll definitely keep that all in mind for the future. I'm used to writing longer fiction, so I guess I need to learn how to ...

Thanks for the feedback! I'll keep it in mind for the future! I think you're the first person to point it out, but I do intentionally write my boys as ...

Thank you for the review! I'm glad to hear the dialogue was good! That's what comes the most naturally to me when writing. I agree with you on my sentence ...

I'm excited to read more! I love seeing character development--whether it's in a good or bad direction :D Can't wait to see where this goes!

Thank you for the review! I'm glad you liked it! I'll try to add more description in the future--I tend to get carried away with the dialogue haha. The title ...

Yeah, I think it would help! Two weeks of torture is a long time to endure, so I'm sure that would taint his memories of her a bit haha

Thank you for the review! I agree with you on the choppy sentences--that's something I struggle with. I don't know why, but sometime last year I started having trouble with ...

Thank you for the review! I agree with you on that exposition paragraph--that's the first thing I'd fix in a round of edits. And you're right about the wonky dialogue ...