SilentButSure

I like this too, it's attention grabbing and makes me want to read more (if only there was more to read :wink: ) One thing I would suggest though is ...

I've read this already but I thought I'd review it because I'm bored. He was laughing, so loud he could be heard above everything else, above the mismatched music, the ...

Your story needs a bit of flesh to it. You have the basic outline but it needs to be padded out with more description. Try to describe how the main ...

Attempt at not being "too nice": Some of the sentences make me think "OMG when is this sentence going to be over", not as bad as the sort of run ...

This is the kind of slightly weird (in a good way) thing I like to read so I really enjoyed this. Just a couple of suggestions though. I walk past ...