Shepherd

This is a great start! The only things I see right now have to do with the pacing, but I think your concept is sound. I am having trouble visualizing ...

First, let me say that this is a truly ambitious story! And you have taken it on. It is certainly interesting, and with a little tuning up I think it ...

This is very well-written, and I think you have done a good job ensuring that we understand some of the peculiarities of the world that you have created (the introduction ...

Hi I like this one, because I think you have set up a very effective interplay between the two characters. The way they speak to one another is very natural, ...

Hi This is interesting. Again, as I have mentioned in one of your previous stories, I do like the choppiness, and I think you have used the capitalization very nicely, ...

Oh I really like this. You have obviously put a lot of effort into this, and I think the introduction and the conclusion are especially compelling. I think everyone else ...

I kept wanting to stop reading this. Not because it wasn't fantastic writing and compelling imagery, but because this isn't my sort of genre. I'm all up for a little ...

Hi I did feel like this story was rather brisk, but I love the choppiness--it gives you a lot more flexibility and I think it clarifies very quickly that the ...