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Thanks! Glad you liked it. I'll sort out that out! Lol :)

Thankyou, I'm glad you like it. :D I will do. :)

Now that you mention it and I re-read it... I know what you mean with the commas. :') I didn't realize, but thank you! I'll try to put that right ...

:D I'm glad you thought of the wars, 'cause it is based on the concentration camps of the second world war. Thanks a lot doll. :P

Ahh XD! Okay, thanks a lot. :D (will correct crumbs right away xP)

Thank you for your review, I'll take it all into account. (:

Thanks Thechocolatewritingcat..xD I think I understand what you mean about where I've placed the words, (No typo, I meant shouting guns, I was trying out some personification because you wouldn't ...

This made me smile. xD

Wowwee. I love this. x] It's beautifully written, and I think it flows perfectly. I'm not very good at reviews, especially with poems. So, this is probably the best you'll ...

Thankss, I'll work on it straight away. ^_^

Okay, thanks. I'll work on it. ^-^

I agree with the other comments. You need to order it into seperate stanzas and take off the capitals. Because it's really hard to read, I gave up. o_x

Oh! That was lovely. xD I love how you portrayed "The Teenager's" feelings. And I agree with all of the above comments. ^o^ Can't wait to read more of your ...

That was great. I mean like... wow. xD I just love this and I can't wait for the next chapter I'm hoooooooooked. :)

Thanks for the PM, again !XD I was too engrossed to actually find anything wrong with this, I think it was perfect. Heheh. >_> Write more soon ! XD