Shadowsun

*munchs cookie* :D

Sorry I haven't posted for a while. I've changed a few things and now I'm ready to post the next part. ----- Chapter 1 - Broken Bonds Part 2 His ...

Good, good. There is more description. The others have commented on everything and I'm not a repetitive person so... I'm enjoying reading this and I'm looking forward to more. ~ ...

My crits are only suggestions! You don't have to do what they say! Maybe I should put that at the top of each one.... ~ Shadowsun

:D thanks Dynamo :D

Ok, finishing the crit I sat still for a minute or two, thinking about what I had just got myself into . Then I shook my head and stood up. ...

This is amazing! I can't find anything wrong with it, but I wasn't really looking for anything wrong with it... Still, this is amazing!

Part 4: ----- They moved silently through the jungle. There was always a need for concealment. Everyone froze as a voice crackled over the radio. “Alpha, this is Bravo. We ...

Part 3: Thanks sworddance :D I hope you all like the third part just as much. ----- The lieutenant ran. He jumped over a stream and carried on running. His ...

Okay. I've read through it all and I've found that it's a really well written piece. The fight scene is good but a lot of people have sed the 'Dance ...

Thanks DarkLight :D Heres part 2: ----- He placed them on opposite sides of the road, where no one would notice them. Then ran towards the treeline and crouched down ...

Thanks DarkLight :D Heres part 2: He placed them on opposite sides of the road, where no one would notice them. He then ran towards the treeline and crouched down ...

Chapter 4 part 2 ***** A pair of deep yellow eyes gazed out into the clearing where the elves had made their camp. A small figure worked its way to ...

This just keeps on getting better and better.

Chapter 4 Part 1 Zanderick sat quietly next to Braynon, watching Rian talk to the Elven Ranger. He cast his mind back to when he had last been to Alanar. ...