ShadowsKittykat

That is very well worded, nothing bad is really needed to be critiqued or criticised in your work. Sounds like a very bitter sweet moment. May use a few more ...

Wow, cool. Different, but this is good different. You did very well at pulling the reader in, me, with the suspense and drama of it all. Quite an enjoyable story. ...

This is very well written. It had very colourful words such as "sparse" and "ebb" laced through out the text. It was a very nice read. It was very detailed. ...

Omg, thats really emotional, even made me cry in places. Great story, though you could deffinitly make it better. I suggest you look at punctuation and spelling. Even though you ...