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Re: 101 Things I Want to Do before I Die
Merry Christmass: 100. Have anyone bother to read this piece because it's so long and meaningless Yay, we can all be happy now! Lol My critique: You forgot your family ...
Jan 18, 2011 -
Re: Disappearing photograph
I don't quite understand the sharp(maybe a word like jagged would be better?) mountain peak and rolling hill part. That's about the only thing I can say, otherwise great poem. ...
Jan 17, 2011 -
Re: Hunter..Or Hunted? (part of chapter one)
I am a little confused, overall, interesting, but maybe be more imaginative. DONT USE VAMPIRES! Its a very cult thing. You hate them or you love them. Try to think ...
Jan 17, 2011 -
Re: The Museum of Dark Artifacts
Great work, very nice. To me, the poem seems to be about how life is unpredictable, darkness around every corner, little light escaping from cloudy skies. Everything happens, seeming to ...
Jan 17, 2011 -
Re: You are science.
My interpretation: So, you are saying that science is lost of purpose and pointless? I am just as useless? I indeed over-think, and poetry is not my thing. This might ...
Jan 17, 2011 -
Re: An endless dream
Interesting, the mood was perfect. I feel that the main character doesn't need development. If it is a dream world, she is everything. Enough said on that. The world should ...
Jan 13, 2011 -
Re: Empty Sky
After browsing this site, the thing that seems to be missing from peoples' reviews is mood. Its hard to create a good mood for a story like this. Also, the ...
Jan 13, 2011