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Seraphim

  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, General Re: The Angel Mission Chp. 1

    Welll i like the plot but You need more detail. I also tihnk that the angels not knowing how to work human things is kind of lame. But please write ...

    Aug 6, 2008
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, General Re: Stairway to heaven.

    Looks interesting so far. I don't know really what to tell you except to watch out for the run on sentances. Please write more

    Jul 16, 2008
  • Short Story » Action / Adventure, General Re: The Wall of Light (working title)

    I'm sorry to anyone eho has read this but I am kicking the idea. But I have a better one that I am working on so don't worry.

    Jul 16, 2008
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Heaven and Hell

    Thank you both for your help

    Mar 22, 2008
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: The Life and Times of Miss Aurora Beaumont (and friends)

    I really like this and it has a nice twist. However it was a little confusing at times and the attachable re-tachable wing I'm not feeling it that well but ...

    Mar 21, 2008
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, General Re: Cyra, Gift of the Water Ch. 1

    I liked it very much, but still you need more depth into it like everyone else said.

    Mar 14, 2008
  • Short Story » Action / Adventure, General Re: One to Midnight

    Looks good do far; few grammatical mistakes but it happens to the best of us.

    Mar 14, 2008
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Alone

    This is really good but like Cade said try to make the expirences in the poems a little more personal so it will hook your readers

    Mar 9, 2008
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, General Re: armagedon

    Like the others said kput in more detail whithout giving too much away but still a good start and souonds interesting.

    Mar 9, 2008


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