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Re: Not sure what to call this :)
NO!!! Please come! There's cake, uh, I need some company!!!!!!! (your quote) I'm sorry it bothers you Ayra. :( That situation is part of a chain of events, and is ...
Tue Nov 20, 2007 11:06 pm -
Re: memoirs of a thief
Break this up into two posts, because the length is very daunting :) :D:D:D:D:D
Tue Nov 20, 2007 10:50 pm -
Re: Not sure what to call this :)
OH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I see why that's confusing now... yeah I'll fix that :D:D:D:D:D:D
Tue Nov 20, 2007 10:35 pm -
Re: Not sure what to call this :)
No no no, Kyte, there IS a fantasy element here, I promise. I can't tell you when how or why at the moment, because that would give everything away, and, ...
Tue Nov 20, 2007 9:27 pm -
Re: Something Out There
Well, practice makes perfect :D Since this is the exciting part, I did try to tone it down a little. I know those parts are like blood, sweat, then OH ...
Tue Nov 20, 2007 3:49 am -
Re: Faith: Chapter Five, Part Two
NO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! /cry /beg /become the most pathetic mess at Fangala's feet. Fangala: /ew.... :D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D Just kidding. Yeah, everyone needs
Sun Nov 18, 2007 1:11 am -
Re: Faith: Chapter Five, Part One
As always, I am here to help. V^o^V Heh.... Thank you for your compliment. ^-^ I'm never good at the grammatical things, so usually stay away from them. :D:D:D:D:D:D Why ...
Thu Nov 15, 2007 10:32 pm -
Re: Thrown into hell; part 3
Okay, the reason you haven't gotten any crit's is because this is WAY too long. Break it up into some smaller posts. That will help. :D:D:D:D
Mon Nov 12, 2007 11:01 pm -
Re: Heaven and Earth: Betrayal ch1 Fate Comes To Call prt2
Holy moo, dude, this is WAY too long! Break your post into smaller bits, and people will crit :D ^o^V
Mon Nov 12, 2007 10:53 pm -
Re: Don't have a name for it yet, but let's call it The Elements
You should probably state that somewhere. Give her a torn mind or nervousness. That would help :D:D:D
Mon Nov 12, 2007 6:46 am -
Re: Don't have a name for it yet, but let's call it The Elements
Much better :D:D:D hmm. What I notice is that you use lots of description for the girl's feelings. Change some of the things, like when she is really excited. Make ...
Sat Nov 10, 2007 9:10 pm -
Re: Jerrsea'ya: Wind of Death part II
I made up the words. :D:D I see why that looks odd... I'll change it. It had relevance before.... but now it doesn't. Why I know so much about this ...
Sat Nov 10, 2007 8:52 pm -
Re: Jerrsea'ya: Wind of death part I
Hmmm.... I think I see why it's confusing now. Thanks Chayonz. I couldn't really see why at first.... I'll see what I can do. :D No, I this story is ...
Sat Nov 10, 2007 8:29 pm -
Re: Giant Wolves/Elements Ch.3 part2
NP. I was trying not to be one of those.... you know... "YOUR WORK IS GOING TO BURN!!!!!!!!!!!!" kind of critics. :D :D :D :D :D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D
Fri Oct 26, 2007 3:57 am -
Re: Faith: Chapter Four
Hmmm. Interesting that Protection wants to be a rock star. It gives me a sense of the times, like the end of our world, or something. I like it :D ...
Fri Oct 26, 2007 3:34 am