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Re: The Day All the Roses Died
Hey, I loved your poem! It's powerful. On the first stanza, I thought it was hard to downshift from talking about roses, to "some" people who noticed that the roses ...
Jan 15, 2009 -
Re: Guardian Angel (I will change title later)
Your story is quite intriguing. I agree with previous reviewers however, a prologue would probably be a good idea to introduce a little of what's going on. You might start ...
Jan 15, 2009 -
Re: Screa, For Halloween
This is an awesome idea. It sounds like a script for a screen-play though, am I right? A bit technologically difficult for theatre, I'm thinking. It would make an amazing ...
Jan 14, 2009 -
Re: The Poker Player
Your story is fascinating. Your perspective is interesting, and your character's curiousity about this woman is intriguing. It makes the reader curious about her too. I was a little disappointed ...
Jan 13, 2009 -
Re: Last Night Tonight
Nice Piece. Robert, Fred, and Cormac are solid characters here. Tommy's bounces a little. At first he seems like a stoic and solid, deep and forboding character. Which is good, ...
Jan 12, 2009 -
Re: From Vengeance to Valor
Hey, you've done well with your prologue. Your writing is very descriptive and visual. I'm wondering about the names of your characters though. You write of a grand battle, with ...
Jan 12, 2009
