ScarlettJewel

I thought that this was about girls on their red time of the month, I loved that the title tricked me. It is definitely funny and the length emphasises this. ...

I think whenever one sees this type of poem, they automatically assume that it is boring and childlike. However, here, you break that stereotype and the result is very sophisticated. ...

Your 'i's do need capitals, or is your lack of them supposed to reflect your laziness and frustration when you have writer's block? I really like the irony of this ...

The first two lines are brilliant, immediately establishing how she feels, and although its not in depth describing I feel that I can picture her after reading those lines. I ...

I see that you've done all the advised corrections so now this poem is really presentable. It is fast paced and to the point, but I wonder if you could ...

"Silently as you discarded me" is just so true to how people treat one another, the slow push away one person does to another. I like the way you have ...

Don't say that this has no flow, it completely does. So what it isn't under a strict scheme? I think that with poetry its about that quick relief. I think ...

I feel like you have really mastered the sister relationship. The fact that the protagonist cannot look in the mirror any more is a painful but understandable moment. Your use ...