Sarah12

Oh, I was quoting from the passage. I don't know how to quote thing in the yellow box. How do you do that?

Alex won't be the main protagonist. This chapter is set in the past. (Spoiler Alert!) Alex comes back later in the story, as a ghost getting revenge on the prince ...

The prince did kill Alex, but thank you for all your advice! This helps a lot, and I will be posting the revised version soon. Thank you again!

This sounds really good! The story line is addictive, and you use correct grammar. I love your style of writing. In your fist chapter, you say, "She sighs tiredly, then." ...