Saphira

Hey Timea! Sorry it has taken me awhile to reply but i haven't had the internet for a month :( Well i will skip the grammer and go straight to ...

The first time i read the books i thought that they were amazing. I was hooked throughout the first book but i did find the middle od Eldest not very ...

The was someone sitting on my bed 'There was someone sitting on my bed' then went back to her texting. If you do, 'and then went back to her texting' ...

I thought this was really good. It flows well but gets confusing in places. I think that the last stanza isn't needed and if it ended on a question it ...

All the grammer and everything is really god but you need to add more puntuation. It flows well but adding puntuation will make it easier to understand and add more ...

This is good. It has a lot of potential and the writind flows really well. The sentence length matches the type of story and the words you have chosen are ...

It is a bit short to be a poem but it was okay. The idea was alright but it was slightly flat. You need to inject personality into your poems ...

I liked this a lot! I think the idea is amazing and the way you did it was fantastic. I agree that the song titles and artists names shouldn't be ...

I tried to read the book after i saw the show in Manchester. I thought the show was absolutly amazing and the story gripped me though i found the protrayal ...

Hey Pn! Sorry it has taken me so long to critique. Everyone has pretty much covered the typos and grammer so i will just put down what i think of ...

I thought J.K.Rowling finished the series fantastically! Every bit of it was just amazing and i thought it was great. I got it on midnight on friday and had it ...

Wow. I am not quite sure what to say. I am not going to grammer pick as i was to involved to pick any mistakes out. I can only say ...

I thought that this was okay. I agree with the comments made by Zafuel. I like that you have done the poem from Orik's veiwpoint. I think that is good ...

I liked it though i think that the structure needs working on. I think that the first stanza seems out of place when you compare it to the content of ...

The describtion in this was fantastic and really detailed. I like how Sara's feelings are expressed and that you gave a history to start it of without doing a boring ...