Sannah

That was epic. Really good. :) You did a pretty good job at developing the characters for a short story and the plot was very well thought out. There were ...

Holy cat!!! You're writing is amazing! :D I just wanted to tell you how wonderful this piece is. The only thing that confused me was, "If you're gonna bring me ...

I think if I picked this book up in a store and started reading it, that I would end up buying it. The way you wrote just seemed like a ...

First things first, please put a space between each paragraph. It'll be easier to read that way. So far it seems that you have a really good idea, but you ...

Now I really want to read the book you are writing... :) I absolutely love it! Sorry if you fall asleep reading this... :D I thought it was really good, ...

So far your story is interesting and has a fairly good hook, jumping right into the action! :) I wonder about specific reasons about why she/he ran away and where ...

I read your other chapters too and I liked them too. :) To make it easier to read, I would suggest putting a line between each paragraph and to start ...

I like where you are taking the story, but some more description would be nice. Some of your dialouge is a bit awkward and that date that Him had with ...

Reading what MeanMrMustard said, I couldn't help mentioning that there is a type of poem called a definition poem. It closely resembles what you are writing, looks a lot like ...

I really like this and am going to read the second chapter after I finish reviewing this! :D I would suggest adding adding an extra line between paragraphs, makes a ...

I was laughing the whole time when she thought she... You know what I mean but... Yeah. I read your other chapters too and thought they were great! And the ...

You caught my attention right away with Shawn in the van and not knowing where he was. Your story was easy to read but I beg you to put an ...

I am here to review again like you asked. Now I am hooked! :D I started reading the part where Myra met up with Sammay after waking up in her ...

It's a good, complex plot, but you tend to dump lots of information on the reader, which is very bothersome seeing how then I have to use my brain. Before ...

I was lost. Seriously lost, because of a mixture of things. You didn't add an extra line between paragraphs, you whizzed from normal world to a water world and none ...