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Heya, Claude! I very nearly threw confetti about when I saw that another chapter was up. :wink: THE NEW POV: Interesting- in a good way. It was just sweet, just ...

Ah, Sumi-san, jyoozu! :wink: I've got to say right away- your style is absolutely beautiful. The 'coronet of moonstones' line was my most favorite. One quick thing: DIALOGUE: is nice, ...

Uhm, yeah, so...I feel kind of empty. This is the time when I have a list of things to rip apart, but there's kind of nothing. *is lame* I've been ...

Hey! Ooh, some more historical fiction and girls who kick butt. :wink: Let's get to your critique, shall we? BAD GUY SYNDROME: Bad guys seem simple- deceptively so. We just ...

Hey, Baroness! Mmm, good story. Jyoozu , as they say in Japan when you've done well. :wink: But, of course, being myself, I've gotta rip things apart, so- your critique! ...

Hey, Gigi! Welcome to YWS- I haven't seen you around before. Hope you like it, though. It's very strange, but the people are friendly. Well, let's get to your critique, ...

Hey, Michelle! Hehe, I remember being the lone ten-year-old on the site...kinda sad. Shows how long I've been here, right? Anyway, let's get to your critique, shall we? I'm brutally ...

A change from heroine addiction and little green girls? Uhm...yeah. :wink: You were worried about publishing awhile ago- Mack, Graham, All-American Kid. Quite honestly, it was all worthy, but you ...

Hey, Parker! You've sneakily picked a time period I know nothing about, so I'm just going to have to take your word for it that the details are correct and ...

Heya, Erin! Welcome to YWS- I haven't seen you around before. :D SOME BORING GRAMMAR STUFF: Most readers and critiquers will love you forever if you just press 'return' after ...

*bows to Imp's well-read-ness* I attempted to read "Paradise Lost" once. It was good for a laugh. ...I later wrote an impression of Milton writing in drama class, a rambling ...

Heya, Amber! Haven't seen you around before...so, I suppose a welcome is in order? :D PUNCTUATION: BAH! ...oh, dear, you've committed the number one sin of dialogue in your first ...

Lily was saying that it needed a bit more depth and characters- so, an idea! There are different ideas in here (the rocky marriage, the sour friendship) that you could ...

Sorry it took me so long to read this, Myth- it's been a crazy week. :oops: So! I read over a few of the critiques before I read (which technically ...

Heya, Moosie! First off, I thought this story was really interesting because not a whole people can write about bands and make it interesting- the Stiff Dylans in the 'Georgia ...