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Yes, I switched around from 3rd to 1st person. Just this once, though. I thought it suited the situation better. Thanks for that messed up tense call there. As for ...

Ooooh... mighty spooky. But, one body? Where's the baby? Pretty decent overall. Can't say much beyond what I've said. Except you've got a pretty neat story so far. Not much ...

Hmmm..... yes, I'll probably change it so that she runs on two legs. I'm picturing it in my head, and I think, yeah, that just sounds and looks better. As ...

Well, I could work in Ada's new powers, but only if I got rid of the note. I need some sort of extension though, to suit the boy. If you've ...

I see... (taking notes) but what exactly is an info-dump? (Whether or not if I've done that here) Thanks for all the critiques!

Quite possibly. I'm making this up as I go along. This story is, as most of them are, a product of the imagination. I don't plan ahead in great detail ...

Good call with that, Jonny. I'll add a fix on that. While I want a super super hero, I don't want anything too eccentric. I'll add a set limit and ...