Rydia

No prob :)

They're definitely worth a read and may give you a few ideas/ help you keep on tone :)

Will do! And I think it's maybe that the reader's expectations are set in part 1 that Chip is a great guy and going to fix all the problems. I ...

I think it would make more sense to make his failings more realistic/ more acceptable. Like if the equipment were broken instead of Margo being muted there'd still be a ...

The problem is even if he's meant to be a bad captain, it will be hard for your reader to accept because he's the main character and therefore should have ...

It's just frustrating to be honest. I think it's because it feels like a fundamental flaw/ a character inconsistency rather than something which he can overcome and which we will ...

I'm not sure. The thing is, he's the captain so we kind of expect him to need to be able to cope with these things so it seems wrong that ...

Whoops, I didn't realise Thorn was a boy! Describing them can help - like if they have long hair or soft hands or small, dainty feet. These kind of things ...

I think it can work from either point of view and you should write whichever you feel more comfortable with but it's more about describing how the characters react to ...

Hehe paradoxes are half the fun!

Oh, that makes more sense xD Although it would be a little cool if there was time travel :p

I'm not sure I understand why it's colder for Chip still - is something making it be the opposite of what each animal needs? If that's the case, maybe Margo ...

No problem and that makes sense, foreshadowing can be a really great device and yes, if you find a way to use the shielding later on then that will be ...

Gah, sorry, it looked like it hadn't posted - bad train internet!

Have you read Terry Practchett? Sure it's not animals but his young adult books are about little blue men with strangely Scottish accents who live in a store and think ...