Rydia

I just had a quick read and it's also worth being aware that at this age, people in the UK choose their subjects so it seems odd she's doing both ...

Sixth form* Sorry, terrible typing!

Elleventh grade is actually year 12 over here! But we don't tend to call it that because it's either six form or college depending on whether you stay on at ...

Perfect :)

I think if you change the order of Joe and Penny then that will make it clearer as the 'her twin sister' will eliminate her being Joe's :)

I think being gay definitely suits Benjamin but yes, his worrying sometimes seems to ease up more than I expect it to and that's fine as long as we have ...

xD If this is the only thing I contribute to the story then I can be very happy with that :D

Yeah, I think it makes us question his character or how motivated he actually is without it so even just another line of dialogue each would set those doubts to ...

xD Yesss I need to start catching up! I finally have internet again so hopefully I should be back in red sometime next week :)

Okay so this is a really fun idea! I think you're expecting me to be a little over generous but, that aside, you've done well at choosing elements of YWS ...

Yes, those are good fixes! :)

xD It's fine, that's what editing is for.

No problem! :)

You can always fix these in edit! Getting to know a character takes time and I definitely find mine change a little in later drafts not because they are different ...

Just to explain my own thinking here - by 'physically' I was assuming that they died having intercourse - hence the hurrah. But it could also be simply that he ...