Rydia

This one I didn't like as much as the other I just read by you. I think it feels a little forced, which may have something to do with your ...

Hi! So I think I'll start with this one. My first thoughts are that it's cute and there's some good stuff but it's a little basic. The repetition works well ...

I'm going to start by saying I didn't like this. I wanted to get that out in the open now as I'm not sure you'll want to read my criticism ...

Hai! Okay so this is nice but it's a bit too short to be honest with you and the beat's off in a few places. Here's a few quick line ...

Why hello there, I guess if I'm here that means it's time for another review ;) My clock was still running askew [This is a strange choice of wording. Your ...

Hey again! So it's the weekend for me (I work rotating shifts) which means you get your second review! Let's take a look shall we? Initial Impressions The section before ...

Hai hai! First off, the concept then. A very interesting idea. I think your title could be more concise though. Maybe something like 'My final thoughts' or if you really ...

I struggled to remember then how to like a work! But anyway, this is real cool and too fun to review seriously. I mean there's a few little nit-picks like ...

Well finally I've reached the chapter you actually wanted reviewing! After this, if you post any more, either write on my wall or send me a pm to let me ...

Next chapter, whoo! Line-By-Line “Zavier! The water’s on, and the fuel ' s low, hurry!” Zora’s loud voice hollered from the front door. I threw down the stack of wood ...

Hi again, getting closer to that fourth chapter ;) Line-By-Line Three days. Three days my only daughter had gone with out [Without is one word.] talking to me, it was ...

Hi there! Sorry about the delay. I've taken another look at your prologue though and it's looking much better so good work. Allow me to take a look at this ...

Hi again! Sorry its taken me so long to get to this. Let's see then. Line-By-Line “Katie, I swear, it was my alarm ' s fault. It went off late ...

Hi there, sorry this took me a while to get to! Alright so I like this. You have a very easy to read style and I think you build the ...

Hi, sorry about the slight delay on this. First off, here's a few specific comments: Doors, That was one of the first things I remember thinking as a little girl. ...