Rydia

Hey there! A few specific comments first: The woman's skin is dark, burned, and damaged. Her posture is slouched, dust from the train tracks covers her shoes as their eyes ...

Ahoy there! I think there's a good concept here and I like the exploration of what love means and why it's worth waiting for, but I found the style a ...

Hello again! I feel like it's hard to follow what setting they're in at the beginning and it would be nice if you described their surroundings a bit more. I ...

Hey there! I've not read the earlier parts so if I mention anything which you feel you've already covered, please feel free to ignore! Specifics 1. “Hey, is that a ...

Hullo! I've not read the previous chapters so please ignore me if I point out anything which you feel is covered earlier! Specifics 1. Dalki wrung her hands. [This isn't ...

Hello! I've not read the previous chapters so if I say something which you feel is covered earlier, please feel free to ignore! Specifics 1. Rease had just gotten into ...

Hello! I haven't read the previous chapters so if I mention anything which you think you've covered earlier on, please feel free to ignore! Specifics 1. There's a lot of ...

Doctor Who mixed with Supernatural? Sounds like my kind of fun! First off, this is a bit dialogue heavy, especially in the beginning there. Give us a bit more description, ...

Hullo! I thought I'd take a look at the next part since I've got some more time to kill :) Annnd I actually don't have any specific comments for you ...

Hello! So I haven't read any of the earlier chapters of this so if I say something and you feel you've already covered it sufficiently in an earlier part, feel ...

Hey there! So I'm a big fan of storybooking and I love character profiles! Whenever I'm working on a novel, one of the first things I like to build is ...

Howdy! Looks like my team's dropping back a bit so I thought maybe I'd do one more. I may be a bit old and rusty but I've never been one ...

Hello! I should note that I haven't read any of the previous sections so if I say something which you feel you've already covered sufficiently in another part, please feel ...

Hey! I felt bad for knocking you off the first place, so I thought I'd give you a review to make up for it before I retire for the day. ...

Hey! So I thought I'd take a look at part two and see if the action gets spiced up :) Specifics 1. I like the first exchange - very smooth ...