Rydia

You've chosen a beautiful subject matter for your poem, dear and I love the almost ghostly feel that laying your poem sort of over the top of this other one ...

London, 1853 "I'm so bored" Edmund groaned as the city fair continued around him. [This isn't the most interesting of opening lines, maybe look for something that's more a description ...

As requested my dear

He was going to buy a present for the woman he loved, [I'd suggest making this a colon.] Emily. I'm going to pause here, at the end of your second ...

Hai! I can happily say that this is lovely and I am not at all disapointed. Your wit and character carry through into the form of poetry very well. I ...

Hullo =) I don't think I liked this one as much as the other I read by you but it has potential, particularly the last verse. You've made good use ...

Hey hey! You've got some beautiful imagery here, hun but I'm not sure that the flow's quite right, it feels like it should be smoother or more rhythmic. Storms are ...

Hey BB! Okay so I like what you've got here, it flows very softly and feels almost like a song. Am I write in thinking this is one of those ...

Hey, you probably don't even remember asking for a review because it's taken me so long to get around to this but it's always nice to have comments, even on ...

I know it's taken me forever to get to this and you may not need reviews on it anymore but I thought hey, it doesn't hurt to have them while ...

Hey there! Sorry about the huge delay, I got distracted by my new laptop and moving location a few times XD Rather than a full line by line, I’m going ...

Hullo! I’m going to take this a section at a time and just quote the parts I have comments for =) I’ll probably give you some overall comments at the ...

Hey Kalli! You've got a good base here but I'll love to see you add just one more verse and then possibly end with an edited version of the chorus? ...

Hey there! Apologies for the delay, it seems I got lazy and then completely forgot there was still one left on my list! If you remind me of that next ...

Imagery At the moment, your poem is supported only by simple images and as such it doesn't particularly stand out. It's difficult to write beautiful metaphors when you're working to ...