RosalynWilde

I love this! It's lively, smooth and engaging throughout! The only thing that sets me off a bit is the way the character's thoughts are expressed. I would use italics ...

This story is a wonderful concept, however it requires more emotion. It seems a bit stiff. I do love the imagery, and the vocabulary! It isn't as engaging as I'd ...

I do love your writing style! It's clean, modern and easy to follow. However, the mixture between simple and more complicated vocabulary does put me off. It is alright for ...

Hello! I couldn't help but notice a few grammical mistakes in your writing. For instance, the writing fails to remain in a past tense. "She can't even remember" Should be: ...