Ronald559

I see. Anyway I've never heard that used unless it was an actual dog, or a cheesy show. "No, bad dog, bad Arkhaion." I strongly advise you to change it.

Yeah, a woman in a writers group gave me a lecture on it a few weeks ago. This is an old short story. I should've reviewed it. I got 3rd ...

I don't think you should dim it down you'd be cutting off your legs. Things can be fantastical without God if you ask me. Just go ask someone agnostic. It ...

I've lived in Florida for 12 years and have never heard that before. And have been all around it. I still live there. Where is Mavon from?

Do you know a book that does this? My advice is look for a book that does multiple pov's within one chapter. So you have a better idea of how ...

I have a question, how come stories aren't liked in this forum? It's simple yet I haven't come across a single story that's been liked? Anyway my point if we ...

in depth review I read over it to see if you were nitpicking and I got to hand it to you, good eye.

I will I just reviewed 3 stories in depth, but I'll come back to yours later to give it a review.

A little too much description also. There are parts when you tell me instead of showing me.

Small comment it's supposedly cliche to start your story with the character waking up, and looking at his clock.

Thank you for reading my story. I read over it, and I just can't tell anymore. But it's nice to know that this is liked/good enough. I'll fix that mistake ...

Ephemera I was wondering why you are no longer Christian? Do you mind sharing. I'm curious because although I've heard many reasons why some people are atheist or agnostic. No ...