Roe

I like this! Sometimes when I read a short story it can be quite slow, but this kept my attention through the whole thing. I only spotted a few mistakes ...

You have multiple grammar mistakes and, like Collision pointed out, you need to work on your tenses. There's also one or two run-on sentences, but those can be easily fixed. ...

Hey there, Roe here to review! "We never smoked. That's just Dad's cigar's, not me." You don't need an apostrophe in cigars Soon, he began to buy packs of Camels ...

The girl takes steps very slowly and looks all around her. She knows she isn't safe here. Her scars are there to prove it. "This is a savage planet." she ...

Wow, this was amazing. You have a real talent for writing, so definitely use that to your advantage. I couldn't find anything wrong with this piece! I read it a ...

Hey there! My comments will be in red today :) He put his hear I think you mean head in-between his knees and she sat down beside him. “It’s Lily,” ...