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Re: Soul Dance: Now Revised
I really enjoyed this poem. I thought it had very good use of literary devices like metaphors, similies, imagery, etc. To read it was almost to dance yourself. Well done.:smt048
May 11, 2006 -
Re: Pop Culture
Overall I agree with the whole topic, and I did think it made sense. However, I don't understand why you used the word's 'real' and 'unreal'. What makes what you ...
Apr 25, 2006 -
Re: [untitled]
WOW. Your imagery was so intense, it practically gave me shivers! You can almost feel the cold you describe; it was that precise. It gave an very haunting feeling. The ...
Apr 25, 2006 -
Re: A love unforgotten
That was beautiful. Sheer, glorious... I don't know. Beauty. I loved it. Just one suggestion though. At the beginning, the piece seemed to flow, to rhyme in a very subtle ...
Apr 25, 2006 -
Re: Heaven for me
Well, I'm not really big on rhyming in general, but I thought your rhyming was actually pretty good. The rhythm gets kind of repetitive, though, and it got kind of ...
Apr 14, 2006 -
Re: Thousand Piece Puzzle
My life is Like a thousand piece puzzle Every day with Themes that never stay The same. Sometimes the colors are Dark and the picture violent While other times, Bright ...
Apr 11, 2006 -
Re: Blessings
Blessings Take my hand boy ... Feast your innocent eyes On the lives of others Overall, I thought this was a very good poem, with a good meaning. Although, I ...
Apr 9, 2006 -
Re: Fog
Wow, I really enjoyed your friend's poem. One thing I would change is the repetition of the word tendrils. 'it's tendrils swirl', 'those tendrils wrap', 'the tendrils bind' gets too ...
Apr 7, 2006
