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Hey gadi, I liked this - it was fun to read and and it really does flow beautifully. I can't find any specific things to rearrange, but I do have ...

Nice to meet you, Audy: 8) I do think you have some good ideas in this. You could take this and develop it into a strong poem - you just ...

You have some wonderful imagery in here: every line makes a wonderful picture. It flows really well, and your line breaks and stanzas all worked well where they are. As ...

Hello, This was a very interesting read for me! Usually non-fiction reports make me sleepy, but this clearly presented the facts in a pleasing way, and I could tell it ...

Hey alleycat, You have a great idea for a story here, and in total it was well presented and well crafted. Some sentences felt a bit rough, but the paragraphs ...

What a fun piece - I really enjoyed it lol. It was sort of violent at the end, but it fit in well with the tone of the rest of ...

All that remained from previous stores around it were debris composed of broken bricks, signposts, shards of glass, and a few trees still straddled the backyards. The last part of ...

Hi Myth, I thought this was a really well written character sketch. I can get a good sense how these characters act and think, and would like to see more ...

Fun mirrors make you Dance and hop slowly, Unsure of how to control The waves and bumps with Their clumsy, sleepy, fingers. Your wording seems a bit off in this ...

I must say, I really really like your style in this piece, and your use of language. The setting description is good too; I can see it clearly in my ...

I really like how this was written. I like how it all seems to build up to one climax, and I like your original descriptions of things. I’ve never felt ...

I liked this - it was interesting to read, and your language used is really good, too. Some suggestions: ...when all washes back to normalcy--that dull, ailing normalcy--the only true ...

Well, I liked your vocabulary you used. It was rather interesting to read. I'm not so sure about your line breaks. Right now, there's basically one sentence per line, and ...

He took a long drag from his cigarette, a glance down the empty hall, and passed the rest of it to me through the cell bars. When I first read ...

This is very good quality writing. I like your imagery and metaphors - they're used efficiently and appropriately. It adds another dimension to what could be (in the hands of ...