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Never said that. My point was the there are other reasons for people using ideas that are commonly thought of as cliches.

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Well, that's another common problem for those of us who are still learning. Please forgive my assumptions.

Is "pretty good" really the sort of phrase you want to use a exclamation point with?

Except that just because you don't say it doesn't mean it's not there. The characters should seem fully formed right from the start, whether you say it or not. They ...

What's Jake, Reinvented about? I see it in the library all the time, but I've never bothered to pick it up.

Yeah, but Hekate, there's also the rule of saying as much as you can in as few words as possible. In other words, be concise.

Not particularly, though there were some amusing moments.

The lines were a bit long for my taste, but there are some really nice ideas, and great images. The tone was just lovely.

Sure, you can write poetry. I have no particular suggestions, but it was all right. With a little tweeking, it could be turned into a rap song.

Darn it all. Why did I say that? I don't want it to be picked apart. I just want suggestions on where to go next.

Ooh. Sting :evil:. But I wrote it for an assignment, and rarely does anything good come from that. I ain't doin' more work on this.

Oh, shoot! thanks for pointing that out. I forgot that when you copy and paste stuff like that doesn't show up. I'll fix that right now. I suppose I should ...

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yes, I remember now, that's the one. I didn't like it. It was utterly pointless, and has no real redeaming value because the boys don't leave, even when they are ...