ReadySetStay

Hi! :) Okay, first of all, this is very short for a chapter. Not necessarily a bad thing, just something I thought would comment on. Also, you could consider turning ...

Hi! :) Okay, so, the first thing I noticed when I clicked on the link to give you a review was that the story's first few lines didn't exactly draw ...

Hellloo. :D So, the first particular thing I noticed about this particular chapter is that it's very short. Now, if you plan on separating this into different sections within the ...

Hi! I'm ReadySetStay, and I shall review for you today. :) I'll go over spelling errors and such ((those which I catch...)), and then go over the content of the ...

Hi. :) First off, I really like your start. It drew me in and seemed lovely, so naturally I wanted to keep reading. She said something in Norwegian, ordering me ...

Hi. :) Just thought I'd review your chapter today. First off, the thing I noticed right off is that the character is very...well, bitter and overly angst-filled. I can honestly ...

Hi. I'm ReadySetStay, and I will be reviewing your chapter today. :D I tend to do more so *general* overviews, rather than nitpicking...but ah, here we go.. First off, the ...