Razzker

Thanks for pointing out those mistakes. Much appreciated. And thanks for your input as well!

Thank you for the review, TheBlackSheep! : ) I haven't had time to edit both chapters extensively, but once I do, I'll let everyone who wants to keep reading know.

Thanks for the reviews, Freyja and DrowningInDarkness! : )

Zachary answered Shirley’s question. Aww, now this is overstating things. Nothing wrong with a "said!" It should be clear from his words that he's answering Shirley's question. Trust the readers' ...

Thank you for the (very in-depth) review! :D For what it's worth, I'm seeing this rod as the Millennium Rod from Yu-Gi-Oh. That's probably less your problem than mine, though. ...

You're welcome! I'm glad that I helped. I see that you've edited it. It's a lot better now and I really want to read the rest. Good job on this ...

You know, you could really turn this into a good story. It's actually pretty good for a six-year-old!

I think ‘pursuers’ would be a better choice than ‘chasers’. Also, you start every sentence with ‘he did this, he did that’. It’s pretty noticeable. He couldn’t see the Incubi ...

I've updated the Author's note. : )

Oopsie. I didn't know referencing Twilight would be so negative. I shall remove it at once. Additionally, I will edit the orb part, thanks for that, Adeera! As for the ...

Before I read, I think you posted this twice. Please delete one of them first before I get confused!

Well, Maple leaves with the guy, leaving Belinda waiting alone. Then Belinda hears a screaming, or a "shrill howl" as you wrote. You then describe the little girl hearing horrible ...

I would like to read what you've written. When will you post it here? You might want to split it into two posts or two parts and then post it ...