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  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: Hellfire

    Okay, I hope I made all the necessary changes, or, at least, I think I got them all. Please let me know if there's anything else I can fix for ...

    May 23, 2009
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: Hellfire

    Wow. Heh. Those are a bit hard to swallow :? However, I'm willing to make the neccessary changes, STARTING with Larara's personality. Which, I'm not too happy about changing, because ...

    May 22, 2009
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Dream

    Okay. Lol. I know it's short, but this is all the dream was. There was nothing else to it, so I don't how I know what had happened throughout the ...

    Mar 26, 2009
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: Surely I'm dreaming...?

    Thanks for the crits and comments! They really help! And, Noemi?(VampireBloodrace): The striking pain in my head told me that this was no dream – I was wide awake. Lol, ...

    Mar 24, 2009
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Death

    Thanks so much for your reviews! I changed those for you to the best of my ability. If you have anything else, please let me know! I hope you enjoyed ...

    Mar 3, 2009
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Through The Eyes of a Cat

    Um, sure :) I need to think of the storyline, but sure. I'll get started on that asap! Thanks so much for the suggestion!

    Mar 1, 2009
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Through The Eyes of a Cat

    Okay! I fixed the fire - eye thing. I hope it works now :) And Trikky, about the 'smiling' thing: this cat does ;) Lol. I couldn't think of another ...

    Feb 28, 2009
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Through The Eyes of a Cat

    Thanks for the critiques! They're always so helpful. I'll fix those straight away! I'm so glad you liked it n_n I see where you're coming from, so I think I'll ...

    Feb 28, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Hellfire Part 4

    I AM ABSOLUTELY NOT HAPPY WITH THAT LAST NAME!!!!!!!!!!!! EITHER USE CANEERO LIKE MY HELLITE STORY OR CHANGE IT TO SOMTHING BETTER!!!!! PLEASE!!!!!! Um...Caneero is Larara's last name, so...obviously

    Dec 15, 2008
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Animal Story

    Oh... haha. Thank you for pointing those out to me!!! I'll fix them right away! It's so weird how the reader notices these things that the writer doesn't... Anyway, thanks ...

    Nov 15, 2008
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Hellfire Part 3

    Okay! I fixed everything! I hope it's better now! Luranno and Daikon aren't as nice anymore! Yay!!! Lol. I hope you enjoy it more, now that I fixed the mistakes. ...

    Nov 2, 2008
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Hellfire Part 3

    VampireBloodrace: Wow...That's a lot of errors. I'll fix those asap! Sela Locke: Lol. Okay, I will admit that it is a little...soft (for lack of a better word) for a ...

    Nov 2, 2008
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Hellfire Part 2

    Lol. Yes, I meant murderer. I can't believe I never noticed that before!!! Also, about the classroom thing; the picture I had in my mind was that everyone was talking ...

    Nov 2, 2008
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Animal Story

    Yeah, I know what you mean. I'll fix those... *hurries off to fix story* Thanks! ~Rayne

    Oct 11, 2008
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: Hellfire

    Thank you all for your advice! It's amazing to see how many mistakes I actually made... But I fixed them all! ^^ OMG Carzyl, you were soo right! I used ...

    Oct 8, 2008


It had a perfectly round door like a porthole, painted green, with a shiny yellow brass knob in the exact middle. The door opened on to a tube-shaped hall like a tunnel: a very comfortable tunnel without smoke, with panelled walls, and floors tiled and carpeted, provided with polished chairs, and lots and lots of pegs for hats and coats—the hobbit was fond of visitors. The tunnel wound on and on, going fairly but not quite straight into the side of the hill —The Hill, as all the people for many miles round called it—and many little round doors opened out of it, first on one side and then on another.
— JRR Tolkien