Rapunzel321

I already did. :)

I tried to make a few modifications but I'm not to sure is I got everything. I might have missed some of the suggestions; for that I'm sorry.

I keep forgetting to mention that I really like the fact that you add a picture or two to your work. It really brings the story out more. :)

Thank you. I've actually modified the paragraph lengths in my Microsoft word document I just haven't published it yet. I want to hear everyone's opinions on what I should fix ...

The next chapter I write will be broken into two. I was going to brake this one into two but I couldn't find a good braking point in it like ...

I was kind of confused as to who you were referring to as you for the fourth line but I really liked the fact that you used to different adjectives ...

Awwwwwwwww. Thank you so much. Nitpicks are really helpful. Not everyone can notice the small things so I'm glad you pointed them out to me. Nothing is perfect so I'm ...

Thanks for the advice and I will try my best to fix my punctuation errors. That's my weakest point when writing. :)

Thanks for the advice. I will definitely keep it in mind. I know that I can only improve from this point on. I really appreciate it.

I think you're trying to make yourself out to be some kind of Villain which I have to admit I admire. Not everyone can truly stand up and tell someone ...

When people write poetry it doesn't have to be grammatically correct because it's what you feel. Not everything we feel can be explained by the laws that come in this ...

I've never had my first kiss because I've always been scared to, but reading your poem makes me less scared. It seems like a wonderful experience to share with someone ...

I've never had my first kiss because I've always been scared to, but reading your poem makes me less scared. It seems like a wonderful experience to share with someone ...

I really enjoyed the fact that you described the main character in depth. Not a lot of people can keep the reader interested while describing someone or someone's surroundings. It ...