Young Writers Society

okay. the stuff is less but its pretty and good. Its too new. I like the plot. It creates a lot of pain in readers mind. I like the eagerness ...

okay the story is little confusing. You know first the story goes on to a road trip, then a dream, then the trip I guess you had many thoughts in ...

Well.. The matter is little less, gives a blurred picture of exactly what is happening in the story. Though what you wrote is nice and secondly when you travel back ...

It makes you feel dumbstruck.. I just felt like I am the protagonist of the story. The run was like hell! It felt so great, the whole story tightly wrapped ...

if you were here near me.. I would have just hugged you.. Awesome story, l liked the character Leon.. Just you are going a way too fast, explain in detail ...

Hey, I am surprised you are just Wao!!!! the chemistry between the girl and the boy is just amazing, a cute story.. The story with a little horror. Just mind ...

Hey..I Like it just one thing you wrote someone cleared their voice it just pops out.. Write something like this I hear footsteps near me, i shut my eyes but ...

Hey..! I like it, just some problems though.. Show some fear in the Protagonist like captiondomdude told you.. i think you didn't mention the protagonist's name till now, that's important ...

Well..Its good i like the fears of the protagonist.. Its pretty good just one thing you are going a little bit off the topici guess you are showing the fear ...

Well the concept of the story is pretty good but i have few quires the begging ,the ice cream part and the movie part are just not mixed with the ...

u just took my attention.. believe me you earned a lot of respect by me just please clear the Mr. S or is this second chapter..I really like the part ...

Hi a good story i really appreciate your work just polish your details and style you know a spark is needed for a good story your story has that but ...