Raelyn723

Thanks for the feedback! Haha I understand your confusion with Peter, which honestly was kind of my goal in a way. I knew that if I made the hospital guy ...

Your review helped a TON. Thank you so much for all the feedback, I really appreciate it. I can see how Elijah comes off as monotonous, I think it improves ...

Thank you for the feedback! I was experimenting with this sort of writing, and I was curious :) I completely understand all of your points and I'll work on editing. ...

Thank you :) I appreciate the feedback :D

Oh my gosh thank you so much! Your review was really, really helpful!! I realize it's not super captivating, it was sort of an experiment for me. I've never written ...

Yeah this was just the beginning. It's actually a very long story, but I didn't want to post a super long thing because that makes people not really want to ...

Thanks so much! I'll be sure to let you know! And I've been working on fixing the weirdness of things. I actually went back and tried to make him seem ...

Thank you so much! I don't really get in-depth reviews so this was great :) I understand all of your points, and the review that got deleted mentioned a few ...

Oh I see :) Well thank you for the review anyway :) I remembered most of it so I am working on fixing it :)

Yes. Not kidding you ;) my dad's is great and all, and maybe it even got published, but I can actually relate to yours. I don't like poems that you ...

Silver. I am not freaking kidding you right now. This poem gets better every time I read it. You have no idea how happy this makes me. It is (I ...

Haha of course ;) there was a review, but I think the person deleted it :/. That's a bummer. You need to post stuff now!

...report what?

You have no idea how happy this made me XD thank you so much!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Thanks! Poetry's not really my thing, but I had to write it for a class :) I appreciate the feedback :)