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Re: Just Forget
WOW! that was good.you placed the words perfectly.And also good riming. I get the part that you are leaving your mom.But why? You did a very good job.But it confuses ...
Jan 19, 2009 -
Re: A Dark Voice: Chapter One
It was nice.But you had some flaws as well.you better explain the characters in more detail.What exactly happened.What did they do with the body?Did they just leave it there? I ...
Jan 19, 2009 -
Re: Be Free
It's quite confusing.I got an idea what the poetry was about in the third stanza. by the way what does 'whispering dark nothings in my ear' mean.Your arrangement of the ...
Jan 18, 2009 -
Re: Save us by the bell
This is great!!Loved the poem a lot.But I am confused about the second stanza.But over all it was brilliant.Best poem I've read so far in YWS.I really liked the third ...
Jan 16, 2009
