RacheDrache

Hey there BlackSheep! I haven't read the first two chapters, so I won't dwell too much on plot or character or anything, but I do have a few writing suggestions ...

Hi KitxKat! 'Tis Rach, and I've got a few suggestions for ya. I'm liking the initial premise of this a lot, and I usually strongly dislike first person fantasy. But, ...

Hey Baywolf! Just wanted to say that, first off, I feel your pain about having a.... um.... very traditional... fantasy story but loving it too much to give it up. ...

Hi CardDragon! Rach here, and I've got a few suggestions for you. First--don't forget to proofread before your post! You've got quite a few errors here and there--typos, missing spaces, ...

I think everything I've got comes down to two main points, at least as of now as I type these letters. The first is that right now, even after reading ...

I am so sorry for the delay in getting to this. You asked me to read days and days ago, but, I'm here now! This might be because I haven't ...

Your bribe/threat was so intriguing I came right over and read. But, I didn't read anyone else's comments. And thus, I apologize if I repeat anything or contradict anything without ...

I'm going to disagree with ThatBoy and say that the informalness was great and that the formalness is what you have to watch out for. Through most of this, you ...

Everyone so far has had a lot of good comments. Follow their advice. No point in having punctuation and formatting errors drag down your work, after all. So pick up ...

Very, very well written (to echo the others) and, as you mentioned, polished. I have a few nitpicks of my own that I'll add at the end of this for ...

I'm still liking this a lot, and you're still dishing out information about the plot in just the right amounts. Looks like Spork already mentioned the comma in that first ...

Psst. Watch your homophones! I was all bracing myself mentally for this piece because 'bare' should be 'bear' and 'no' should be 'know' in the first glimpse of this I ...

I didn't read the nitpicks Jetpack picked out, but I agree with everything else she said, and so I'm assuming she got the same of the errors I caught. The ...

Love. Hearts. Confetti. Half of me wants you to not read this review, U, and go write the next chapter. The other half wants you to read this review, because ...

You've got a good sense of suspense building here, and despite myself (this is far from my type of story) I want to read on. This is so short, though, ...