Questio

I think that the chorus being repetitive is part of this angry-yet-pop song going on. It's simple and repeated to get the point across. And I don't think that any ...

Everything that bothered my inner poet Rydia mentioned, so listen to her!

In the first stanza, third line, I think you meant "we're over," not "were over." Other than that, I like it (enough to reveiw it, at least [I don't mean ...

I edited out the parts i didn't like, but the connected words don't show up as part of the story when I am typing it on Clipboard... is it a ...

Those were my exact thoughts on the last paragraph too, after I reread it.

The typing is kinda cluttered because I had some surgery on my hand, so sorry about all the combined words. Also, when the point of view switches people theres meant ...

Gave me shivers. But then again, there are those who say my imagination is TOO vivid...

It was really hard to try and write from the point of veiw of a second-grader, and I am glad that you liked the piece. As its for a writing ...

Most of those were typos.

I was trying to write the piece from the point of veiw of a second-grader, so I tried to keep it simple. Most of my works are more discriptive and ...

Thank you! I generally don't rewrite pieces, but this is one that I hope to submit to a local writing contest to win $1,000. I need all the help I ...

:) That is probably the single greatest thing anyone could have said at that moment, and that is what is so realistic. Made me laugh out loud.

Actually, most of the misspells and grammer stuff was the website accidentaly altering the work. Sites like this do that sometimes Thank you for your awesome reveiw!

Crap was a typo apprarently. Something the site did, I think. Should be "Crab walking."

Very interesting piece. Thats all I can really say at the moment. I may have to read it again to really reveiw.