PsychicNinja

Rawr, I'm here for the chapter: She was perched and alert, studying her surroundings. I suggest using a better verb instead of 'was'. For example, 'sat'--just to give us a ...

Hey, Vampire, I promise that this critique'll be much shorter. :D - 8 years old - I am still a bit confused about this, but just to be sure: Your ...

This sounds very interesting. A bit short, so I can't do a big crit or anything... but I like it. ~Timea

Hm...I didn't like this too much. A little too overdramatic and too self-pitiful. I like the end and i think there was a little rhyming in there, but I don't ...

I'm back! Toshiruo's eyes widened. "You can see hollows?" I believe that Hollows need to be capitalized. Like Soul Reaper. You keep spelling Toushirou wrong. The brown haired girl stared ...

This really moved me. The beginning was the best. It was amazing and you captured what it is to lose someone. ~Timea (Sorry this crit didn't turn out to be ...

Hey Mai. No, this sounds very good. I like the rhyming in most of it. I think the second stanza is very good. I think you could expand on this, ...

I totally agree with what the others have said. To me, it just sounds terrible. It is not deep and I just don't care. I would write more derogitory comments, ...

Awesome. I can really tell that you're improving, Maki-chan. Good work. ~Timea

This was very good, Maki-chan. I liked it a lot. I'm not so good at critting poems, but I thought it was very interesting (if not a tad bit weird..) ...

Sorry, Maki-chan, but this makes no sense if it's in the real world. It should take place in the Soul Society. Some part of the Rukongai with snow. Then it ...

Gryphon-chan, Shirou-kun's eyes are he really isn't an albino. Bleach is awesome!! Haha, that's okay, Maki-chan. ^_^ I enjoy helping other writer's become better. YWS helped me a lot. Just ...

Yeah, no problem. I love doing Naruto fanfic reviews. (I've started one myself, if you want to check it out.) They're always so fun, and since I'm so obsessed...I can ...

I fixed it so now there are compound sentences and that part isn't so random. :D :D ~Timea

Domo arigato, Joel and Audra! :D Jonin is like Genin, Joel, 'cause its a title and a rank. I'm not sure if they really should be capitalized (like chakra isn't)...but ...