PsyLynx

it's very elegant and touchingly sad...conjures an image in my mind of a tree in the movie What Dreams May Come; it was sad and forlorn, with dark purple leaves, ...

I thought it was beautiful....I think you should find a way so that you don't have to explain it...just help the reader by letting them know that someone is falling...and ...

I think the OH ANGEL OF INSPIRATION STRIKE ME should be lower case with an exclamation point, but it isn't a big thing, at least to me. And I like ...

I like "And my mind is in decline" and "For fate, hope and reason Irregular heartbeats Twisted feelings The rain almost an aphrodisiac Just acknowledge me please" everything else didn't ...

It's so painfully mundane...you try to spice it up by saying the same old same old in new ways, and...you do say it in new ways, or at least with ...

I just so happen to be reading it now too, but I should tell you that, according at least to the translation I'm using, it isn't his landlady he kills ...

I don't agree with the too-much-description bit. It isn't a particularly huge amount of description... I agree with the rest. It's short, it's sweet, but very little happened....there wasn't any ...

I hate this. I hate 'maturity' and I hate 'wisdom'. I...don't...get...them. People have told me that I'm a deep thinker, and what that means, I have absolutely no idea. I ...

I didn't think it was good at was pure cliche, and not done excellently. It rhymed, had meter that was not flawed, I'll give you that...but that's not poetry, erm, ...

It was pretty good and powerful, and the only thing that kept it from being better was that...I can't quite say, but it didn't really flow...you repeated lots of the ...

If you corrected all the errors that Snoink said, then there were still a couple, just nitpicky proof-reading things. Blah, though; unlike him, I really don't care about that. This ...

dreams are so cool....I don't think that I've seen any dreamish visionish poems on this site before, which makes this particularly cool, and the ending be good. I'd type more, ...

It's great, it's the most exciting poem I've read in a long, long time...not that I've read many poems in a long, long time :? But it's great, flows excellently, ...

I don't like it as a poem. I can definitely feel that it was inspired from a song, and often that happens to me and I write things that I ...

The only line I didn't really like was the "I need you tonight (ache)" because it's, well...cliche (as if everything that's worth saying isn't) and because the very next line ...