Pringle

Hi I liked this story, it was a good idea and very enjoyable to read. The beggining is very good as it makes the readers think that they are really ...

I chose this because I was intrigued by the interesting title. It was good and the main character was well drawn, however I thought it ended too soon. I thought ...

Hi This was good except it was a bit short. Some plot lines are not fully explained, like the mention of Tom's son. This could probably have been expanded a ...

Hey This was going great. So where's the rest of it??? You have created a strong MC who is in an interesting situation, but what is it? Why can she ...

Hi It was as if Arizona was born on fire This seems a bit awkward and unnecessary. Change it to something else, or delete it. lye her reflection]/quote] this should ...

Hi This sounds like an interesting idea. I couldn't find any errors in it. The main character Zackaria is well developed and you do a good job of describing her ...

Hi there First up I liked the opening sentence you are probably going to fail english This was a great way to start the story as it makes the reader ...