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Re: Giant Eagle Jungle
Hi I liked this story, it was a good idea and very enjoyable to read. The beggining is very good as it makes the readers think that they are really ...
Jun 12, 2009 -
Re: Things she Learnt to Lie about [needs help please review]
I chose this because I was intrigued by the interesting title. It was good and the main character was well drawn, however I thought it ended too soon. I thought ...
Apr 13, 2009 -
Re: Please Come Back.
Hi This was good except it was a bit short. Some plot lines are not fully explained, like the mention of Tom's son. This could probably have been expanded a ...
Apr 13, 2009 -
Re: It's the things you don't hear...
Hey This was going great. So where's the rest of it??? You have created a strong MC who is in an interesting situation, but what is it? Why can she ...
Apr 8, 2009 -
Re: By the Sea {1}
Hi It was as if Arizona was born on fire This seems a bit awkward and unnecessary. Change it to something else, or delete it. lye her reflection]/quote] this should ...
Apr 6, 2009 -
Re: Children of Tokua. Chapter One. Part One
Hi This sounds like an interesting idea. I couldn't find any errors in it. The main character Zackaria is well developed and you do a good job of describing her ...
Apr 4, 2009 -
Re: The Importance of Doing
Hi there First up I liked the opening sentence you are probably going to fail english This was a great way to start the story as it makes the reader ...
Apr 2, 2009
