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Hey.. This really should be rated. When you're submitting, there's an option to select 12+, 16+ or 18+. Okay, so this is going to be kiinda harsh. First of all, ...

Hey there, This was great!! I didn't find any problems with it at all. It was amazing. :) I could really feel what the character was going through, the writing ...

Hey there, Awesomeness!! I really loved this. Beautiful writing :) I loved how you brought out their feelings. It was pretty much perfect! Except for some nitpicks: A small, sad ...

Hiya, I liked this, it was very beautiful :) Awesome writing, great beginning!! But, like was mentioned, it was a little bit confusing cause' I didn't know what was going ...

Hi there! The grammar needs some SERIOUS work. It was all one big sentence! It was very very confusing. Break it up into sentences, with full stops and stuff, and ...

Heya! Awesomenesss!!! The only issue I had with it was grammar, which has already been pointed out. Otherwise, I love love it, it's so dark and it flows beautifully. Love ...

Hey there, It was cute, I liked it. But there were some punctuation and grammar mistakes that distracted a bit from the story..corrections in red: My heart was pounding fast ...

Hey there, Just a few grammar mistakes: Once upon a time their was a princess. there I closed the children book and looked up at the crowd. children's The dialogue ...

Me again. :D “Hey! Mr. G, I’m done,” I said after I found him standing near the rose garden, staring at particular withered yellow one. He turned around, nodding at ...

Hey again, Haha, loved this. Mr. G. :D Really nice, and the whole angel like a lot. :) “Take care of her?!” I thought '?!' wasn't proper punctuation, but I'm ...

Hii, Again, the tense thing. It keeps jumping from past tense to present tense. Also, her getting into the limo with a stranger and stuff is totally unrealistic. To me, ...

Hiya, I love Alia. She seems awesome xD. Anything wrong with it has already been pointed out ^^ I also noticed that sometimes it changes from past tense to present ...

Hii, Idea sounds interesting. :) Your dialogue needs punctuation though, like StoryWeaver13 pointed out, and there were parts where it sounded kind of fake and unrealistic. "No, I am fine," ...

Hiya, I like the idea. I like the way your story started with a *bang*. It seems like an interesting idea. Anyway, my dad hit me several times and tried ...

Beautiful article :) Harry Potter *was* amazing, it feels kind of weird that it's over. I loved the whole series, it was just freaking amazing. Hermione's always been my role ...