Poltergiest

Nice. I really liked it. Uh, a little confusing. Might wanna make the first post longer to explain more things but... I wanna read more! (Don't I awlways say that? ...

Ah... You're right though. There was something about this one but I couldn't quite place it... Anyway. I liked the first bit with Seden and Brad even though I thought ...

Okay... Huge info dump here. Uh, I'm gonna have to read it again but my first impression is that you have alot planned out. Thats accually really good and shows ...

*Rubs hands together* Ooo... I sense the start of a pretty good story. Uh, for some reason I wouldn't do my proluage like this but thats only cause I'm wierd ...

I loved it. As usual. Uh, I like how Annie was really emotionless n'stuff. I think Cat should have been two, that would ahve been cooler, for some reason. Uh, ...

*Snigers* That was... Wierd yet funny... :P :roll: ~Pol~

Wow... I don't read alot of peotry but I really liked this. Uh, as far as I could tell the puncuation was fine... It was a little bit mysterious which ...

*Nervous laughter* Uh... I thought it was going to be a really good story up unto they shouted the Pepsi thing... That, was wierd. Other than that I noticed barely ...

I lied it way more than I thought I would. Uh, first of all, check grammar and whatnot. Theres a spell check button at the bottom and just use taht ...

I didn't understand really any of it... Sorry, I'm not to good at criting poetry so as far as I know it could have been the best peice of literature ...

I really liked it. It was somehow unlike any other peotry I've read on this site and I really liked it. (I've siad that before. *Head/Desk*) It made you think ...

Hooray! Okay, I liked this one more mabye because there was less action and more planning... Hmm... Anyway, I'm not sure Brad would just agree to go off anf do ...

*Sighs deeply... Very deeply* Uh, SP... Okay, here we go... I think you have the start of what could be a pretty good story... Um, I'm kinda with Sniok on ...

Yay! I detect a love intrest. Anyway. I thought it was really good, (Is it possible to say anything else? I really don't know) Anyway, I was a little confused ...

YYYYEEEEEESSSSSSSSS!!!!!!!! Perfect. Okay, first of all, I think you kinda slipped magic in there rather nicely. It wasn't too abrubt. I think I liked the thing about the price... Uh, ...